August 17, 2018
I chose a topic from the Sports and Recreation, and it’s about Motorsports add no value in the society.
“Motorsports Add No Value In The Society”
Have you ever wondered on how much money your favourite sport spend for the whole season? Do you think they spend it wisely? Or they’re just being wasteful? It’s okay to be a fan of something like a singer, actress, players, sports, and etc. but have you ever thought that if we never did this and just do a different thing that everyone could enjoy, do we make the world a better place? Because for me, yes.
I’ll take motorsports as an example, let’s just imagine how much materials they use in order to make just one race car, then let’s imagine the process on how these materials are made in order to make a race car which adds gas emissions that affects our climate.
Do you think we are finished? Uhh, no. Instead of using the large amount of land mass that motorsports use to build mega race tracks for them to use and race, we could use it to build more houses for those people in need, we could use it to plant more crops to fight food shortage, or to help other countries who are also in need.
Humans are born with selfish desires, even though we want to control our not so good decisions that make it harder for others, we would pick the choice just for ourselves. I am not saying that all of you would start a hate group with motorsports, but I made this to be an eye-opener for all of us. Did you know that since 2011-2017, the worldwide sponsorship spend is up to about $36.94 Billion? If you want some thrill, just go to your local bungee jump instead of buying tickets for a motorsports championship
Some good points Alyana and I like the structure to your essay. Your next steps would be to lessen the gap between your paragraphs, and to include more persuasive language features other than rhetorical questions.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mr. Aitken for your feedback on how I could improve my writing. However about the gaps between my paragraphs, I did those to prevent my writing to go across the white surface of blogger. Thank you again. :)
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